Website Migration Update


I moved the website to a new host, which I think will be more tolerant of the content this website hosts. Nevertheless, I do want to take a moment to remind everyone that the stories and content posted here MUST follow website rules, as it it not only my policy, but it is the policy of the hosts that permit our website to run on their servers. We WILL continue to enforce the rules, especially critical rules that, if broken, put this sites livelihood in jeapordy.

A Game F/FF, FF/FF, etc.

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A Game F/FF, FF/FF, etc.

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Great idea, but could you have them talk in more conversational language? They talk very formally. Slang, contractions, that kind of thing would really help.

But you have a great concept here, please continue....
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I dunno. The story and concept is a lot of fun and interesting but...

I just couldn't give any less craps about her backstory, her parents backstory or her grandma's backstory.

I understand you're wanting to build a story with Characters with depth and such but I just don't think it fits in at all with the story itself.
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NoOne wrote: 5 years ago Probably true. Currently rewriting.
Let me know if you want me to Beta Read for you. I always like helping others writing.
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Dr_Depravo wrote: 5 years ago I dunno. The story and concept is a lot of fun and interesting but...

I just couldn't give any less craps about her backstory, her parents backstory or her grandma's backstory.

I understand you're wanting to build a story with Characters with depth and such but I just don't think it fits in at all with the story itself.
I agree wholeheartedly.
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Soo good to read you again :) This story gets better and better!
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Amazing story. Keep up the great work. Can't wait to hear the next part.
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Great Update!
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Excellent writing and story. Love the twists and turns of the plot. Keep up the great job.
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Poor Amanda - in trouble again :)
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love it. great twist and character addition.
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Great part! I liked the conversation in the shower between Amanda and Shannon. I hope Erika will get some of her own medicine. Beautiful Outfit for Amanda!!
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Great addition. Love the story. Can't wait for the next part. Keep up the amazing work.
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Things are about to get even more intense :)
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awesome chapter. great twist. very creative.
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dogrednuht123 wrote: 4 years ago awesome chapter. great twist. very creative.
I enjoyed this chapter very much :) The complete Story is great.
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