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ajohnson wrote: 1 month ago I’m totally fine with moving the story to the fictional category, especially if it will increase the number of readers...
Excellent. Your story is now in the Fictional area. The headline at the top of the first chapter makes it quite clear that it's an embellished account based on true events. It fits in either section, but strategically, this section is more advantageous.

I've just read Chapter 5. It's a really strong chapter. Will be sharing my thoughts about it shortly.
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@bondagefreak Thanks! I also think it's the best to have it in fictional category with note that it's based on true events.
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ajohnson wrote: 1 month ago Chapter 5: All the Boys Love Those Ray-Bans
Another very poignant chapter. This one had a very nice twist to it, what with smug rich-boy Dylan meeting an untimely fate before eking out a win in the end. His clever scheme (the misleading notebook) turned out to be mighty useful. Very cunning indeed.

In a sense, this guy is the opposite of Cameron, in that he oozes calm control.

Having said that, it was certainly quite amusing seeing him get knocked down a peg by being staked to the ground.
I particularly liked the taunting about everyone else now getting to "look down" on him 8-)


The ambush scene was a brilliant feat on his part. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Those hogties must've been quite brutal. Nate clearly got the short end of the stick, though. Being unclothed, spread-eagled and mercilessly tickled by a group of guys sounds hellish! Being tickled by a group of guys, only for one of them stuff-gag your mouth while the tickling is happening sounds even worse!

Good lord, that must've been one hell of a sight :lol: I'm sure as hell glad I wasn't the one being interrogated by this group!
All in all, this was a super fun chapter. Thoroughly enjoyed it.
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ajohnson wrote: 1 month ago Chapter 6: A Lynx or a Monkey
Another well writer, fun-loving chapter. Tyler sure is a slippery one. Definitely needs to be kept in strict bonds if he's to be prevented from escaping. Poor Hawks. I love Noah's continued taunting of Ethan and loved him flaunting the fact that his socks are buried inside Ethan's mouth. The sheer embarrassment! Pure gold 8-)

Really looking forward to seeing what the hell Noah has planned for all the captured Hawks. I literally have no idea what his sadistic mind could possibly have conjured up. Can't wait for the next chapter, buddy. Awesome stuff!
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ajohnson wrote: 1 month ago Now you know how all of the leaders got captured and in the next chapter the game will start to unfold. What’s your favourite captured leader? Who do you think could win?
My money's either on the Green Wolves or the Grey Falcons.

As for who my favourite leader is, I'm liking all of them quite a bit, but I'm definitely liking my fearful boi Cam the most. The guy is basically born for the ropes. His fearful-nervous nature is quite endearing. I'm definitely hoping the Falcons keep him tightly bundled up for a good looong time. The Blue Otters' leader definitely deserves some peace and tranquillity ;)


There we go. Fully caught up now. Awesome tale so far, buddy.
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@bondagefreak Thanks a lot, man! I didn't expect that Cam would be the favourite character, but I'm glad he's getting some love. :D There are some exiting thing waiting for him, especially in a sequel (if I write it).

The next chapter maybe won't be published as quickly as these previous, because now comes the tricky part - merging all 5 plot-threads into a single one. So, I'll take my time to do it on a right way. Also, I doubt I can finish the story (about this game) in Chapter 7, so it won't be the last one.
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Keep writing, good stories should never end.
To tie you up is human, to tie you up and tickle you is divine. ME :mrgreen:
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I'm a Dom and a bondage-giver myself. So, although I can relate to assertive characters/people, I am naturally drawn to meeker guys and introverted women. Those with fears and anxieties (like Cam) tend to automatically trigger my protector instinct.

Had I been at that camp and had I been privy to his secret relief at the loss of control, I would have gladly spent a good half hour very meticulously trussing him up with mountains of rope and made doubly certain to keep his mouth fully packed.

As for the next chapter, do take your time. We will wait.
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@WhoAmI Thanks, I certainly will!

@bondagefreak Now I get what you mean. At least there where kids who knew how to handle him. ;)
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After I saw bondagefreaks mention, I took a look at your story. Didn't intend to read it in one go, but I enjoyed my time with it, so that's what happened. It helps, that even with six chapters, its not super long (this is good, I enjoy the short chapters). Due to reading all in one go, I can't give you chapter-wise feedback, except for a handful of notes.

I think the vibe is wonderful. While you wrote it like a fictional story, it still reads a lot like a memory told. There is something cozy about your writing, which I think stems from that.

I will somewhat disagree with bf here, and say that I very much appreciated the introduction of the leaders. I mean, there is the inclusion of their clothes, which is hard to remember, and not ideal (though I get a feeling, that the way they were dressed was important to you, so I understand why you added it), but I do think you also included important details that makes those leaders stand out. I kept coming back to this part, because due to the high amount of characters, I got a bit lost, and having this reference was very useful. Again, mainly because you added more details than just the clothes.

That said, I will have to at least skim over everything, because with the big amount of characters, I got totally lost. Which isn't a big deal, at least at the moment, where each chapter was just focused on one leader at a time being captured.

My favorite chapter was the second. One question first: Did Ethan let himself get tied up so easily, because he didn't think he could win against three? Even though he is roughly five years older then them?
Anyway, I simply enjoy the way the power dynamics worked here. With him being normally in a position, to punish (?) someone like Noah. Which then got reversed, and he became the captive of the one he pissed off before. The turn for Ethan, realising that his captors were actively trying to torture him, and him then getting angry, but helpless, was great. I loved the part, where Noah then humiliates him, by explicitly stating how he will embarrasse him. And Ethan being unable to do anything about it, only lying there, helplessly gagged and hogtied, even seeing himself in that position. Humiliated by a boy five years younger.
Which then got better in chapter 6, where Noah did as he promised. The whole bit, where he forced Cody to look at Ethans gag, with Ethan unable to do anything about it, was great. Oh, and just the detail, that Ethan had been prisoner for two hours at this point, completely helpless.

To be clear, I enjoyed the other parts too, but this one worked just so well for me.

Well, that's enough for now. I'm looking forward to reading more of your memories.

Thanks, @bondagefreak for making me aware of this story. It's lovely.
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@FelixSH Thank you so much for your comment! Ethan’s part of the story has always been the most exciting one for me too, but I’m really glad to see that other readers are equally enjoying some of the other characters, like Cameron.

Regarding your question about Ethan’s capture—my take on that situation is that Ethan simply wanted to keep things friendly and tried to follow the guides to the game, which included getting captured as a leader. He didn’t see it as something where he really needed to resist or overpower the boys—although he probably could have. I don’t think it even crossed his mind how much Noah might humiliate him, even though he knew what Noah was like. I could also say there’s another reason why Ethan found it more acceptable to let them tie him up rather than trying to overpower and tie them up—but more on that might come in sequel. :D

I’m almost done with Chapter 7: The Boiling Point, in which the story between Noah and Ethan continues, so I hope you’ll enjoy that part too!
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Indeed, a multi-arc story that focuses on a number of simultaneous events and characters is quite the daunting task, even for a seasoned author. I also ended up having to regularly use the first chapter as a reference point. So even though the format is one I have long critiqued, it does serve its purpose. Mind you, my misgivings about such a format don't have to do with usefulness. It's rather a question of lower reader retention rates.

In my case, I chose to approach the story in an episodic fashion and paused my reading between each chapter. I think it makes each individual chapter more memorable and less of a blur. My approach to reading it would've been quite different had it been narrated through the eyes of one individual and focused on a single arc. I would have ploughed through all the chapters in one go.

Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed the recommendation, my friend. Cheers!
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Chapter 7: The Boiling Point

At the moment when Mr. Parker's voice came over the loudspeaker announcing that half of the game time had passed, the atmosphere inside the Lynx cabin was reaching a boiling point. Seven boys from the Hawks team were tied to wooden beams, while their leader, Ethan, was lying on his stomach, his hands bound behind his back, legs tied together, and gagged with Noah’s socks. His face was already smeared with sweat, matted with the dust from the cabin floor, and his eyes followed Noah’s every move with a hint of anxiety. The Hawks' sneakers had already been removed on Noah’s command and tossed into the corner, while the cabin was filled with the awful stench of sweat and grime.

“You want us all to suffocate, you jerk? What’s this all about anyway?” asked Liam angrily.

"Stop whining like a little girl. If you can't stand it, go outside! It won't last much longer anyway—victory is near," Noah replied. "Alright, guys. Take their socks off now," he added. The Lynx boys went around to each of the captured Hawks and began removing their socks. For some, they couldn’t pull them off because of the ropes. "If you can’t get them off, loosen their legs a bit, then tighten them again afterward. We don’t want our stinky buddies running off anywhere," Noah said with a laugh.

Once all the socks had been removed, Noah stepped in and began collecting them with a grimace on his face. There were fourteen sweaty, dirty socks—white, black, and gray. Clutching the bundle in his hands, Noah walked over to Ethan and crouched beside him.
"Time to smell your boys," he said. He sat down on Ethan’s shoulders and instructed two of the bigger Lynx boys to sit on his legs to keep him from kicking, since Ethan was no longer hogtied. Noah grabbed Ethan’s hair, pulling his head up, and with his other hand shoved the pile of socks under his nose. Ethan desperately tried to resist, holding his breath, but it was no use. He couldn’t turn his head left or right—Noah had locked it in place with his knees, pressing his hands down to force Ethan’s face into the heap of socks.

"Hey, you're still resisting! You just need to relax and breathe, that's all. Your fellow Hawks will do the rest—if they really love you as much as they say," Noah said in a calm tone. Ethan finally gave in and inhaled the awful stench through his nose, after which he began making noises like he was about to throw up at any moment. His eyes were bloodshot, while the rage and humiliation inside him had reached a boiling point. "Can I possibly fall any lower than this?" he wondered to himself, while Noah and the Lynx boys laughed around him.

"Disgusting! I’ve been wearing mine for three days. Poor Ethan—I can’t even imagine what he’s going through," said one of the Hawks.

"And I've been wearing mine since the beginning of the week. We have to tell them, we lost anyway. He’ll get intoxicated, I mean it smells worse than any poison," added another boy.

"Come on, just tell them already! I don’t know where they took him," sobbed little Cody, who couldn’t take Ethan’s torment any longer.

"STOP!" shouted Mark, one of the older Hawks. "I know where Tyler is—I’ll show you, just leave Ethan alone!"

Noah lifted Ethan’s head out of the socks and said, "Talk! Where did you take him?" Through his gag, Ethan tried to mumble something like, "No, don’t tell them…" even though he himself wanted the nightmare to end. Mark described where the Hawks' base was, after which Noah gave the order to get him ready to leave and to put socks and shoes back on the remaining Hawks. He stood up from Ethan and said, "I know you're enjoying this—I’d gladly leave you to stew a bit longer in the socks, but we’re all starting to suffocate around you, so they’ll take them away now."

The Lynx boys collected the socks and shoes and began hurriedly putting them back on the Hawks, without any order or care. Some of the boys protested that they were being given the wrong socks, but the Lynx didn’t really care. Red-faced from humiliation, Ethan at least finally felt a sense of relief that he could breathe fresh air again.

Ben calculated that only four Hawks were still free, after which Noah gave the order to take Mark and have all the Lynx go to free Tyler and to capture the rest of the Hawks, sealing their fate. He decided to stay behind with the prisoners—he didn’t like wearing shoes without socks, and he didn’t feel like walking barefoot through the forest.

* * * * * * * * *

Meanwhile, another boy was bravely resisting interrogation. It was Nate, who was tied to a table by the Falcons and had been getting tickled for half an hour. His stomach glistened in the sun from sweat, and his cheeks were soaked with tears as he laughed uncontrollably. At one point, they brought out feathers, took off his socks, and started tickling his feet, underarms, and nose. Though he held out for a long time, Nate eventually broke and began shouting through his gag something that sounded like, "Stop! I’ll tell you!"

Sam gave the Falcons a signal to stop and pulled the bandana from Nate’s mouth. "Got something to say? Come on—where’s our leader?" he asked, leaning in close to the exhausted Nate. Nate slowly lifted his head from the table, as if to whisper something to him—but instead of an answer, Sam got a mouthful of Nate’s spit right in the face. His expression twisted with rage in an instant. The previously calm Sam snapped, gritting his teeth as he muttered, "You’re gonna regret that… but you brought it on yourself." He draped an old dirty rag over Nate’s face. Nate didn’t have much strength left to fight back—and he knew it would be pointless anyway. And just as Nate was wondering what was going on, he felt water being poured over his head. Sam stood over him, pouring water onto his face from his bottle.

"You wanted to act like a big man, Nate? Then you’ll get an interrogation fit for a big man!" Sam said angrily. As soon as Sam paused after a few seconds, Nate gasped for air and cried out, "Stop! I’m begging you, stop! I can’t take this!" Sam started chuckling. "I know you can’t—people much older and tougher than you can’t either." He pulled the rag off Nate’s face, whose eyes were full of tears. "See how quickly you learned to be a polite little boy? You even begged me. Now, once again—where’s Dylan?" Worn out and broken, Nate began to speak, while his captured teammates looked on with sorrow, realizing they were on the brink of defeat—but also with admiration for Nate and everything he had endured.

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On the other side of the camp, a worried Luis had decided to ignore Dylan’s warnings, gagging him again with a bandana and nervously waiting, hoping his teammates would return any moment. Dylan laid on the ground beside him, with his arms and legs stretched. He felt proud of himself, knowing that the Wolves had walked right into his trap—but also nervous, since his fate now depended on others, and he had to lie there tied up on that dirty ground.

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While his fellow Wolves were going through a tough time, Jason was still having friendly conversations with the Otters, who were holding him captive. He had been lying tied in a hogtie for three hours, and he was starting to feel the numbness creeping into his arms and legs, but he didn’t want to complain in front of the boys, so he just tried to ignore it.

At one point, Toby asked him, "Hey, Jason! When was the first time you were tied up—and who did it to you?" Jason looked at him confused, thought for a moment, and finally said, "Well… I don’t really remember anyone tying me up before. At least not so I couldn’t get out of it myself." -"Woooow! So we’re the first ones to actually take you down!" Eli said proudly.

The Otter boys kept laughing and chatting, not paying much attention to Jason, who had sunk deep into thoughts. Images from past camps swirled through his mind—from before he had become a leader. He had never let anyone tie him up. Even when his friends politely asked to practice knots on him, he would rudely refuse. Because he was strong and proud—and guys like that weren’t supposed to be the ones tied up, right? He asked himself,
"Why did I let them tie me up now? I could’ve taken down all four of them and tied them up. But I let them put me in this position. Why do I feel… excited? Or maybe even more than that? Why do I… like this? What’s wrong with me?" The questions kept spinning in his head.

At one point, he noticed the ropes around his wrists had loosened—probably from the sweat, since he had been lying in that uncomfortable position for so long. He tried to free himself again, and finally managed to slip his hands out of the rope. Quietly, he lowered his legs to the ground and began untying them, while the Otter boys still hadn’t noticed anything.

He hesitated again: "Should I run before they see I’ve escaped—or should I tie up all four of them and go help my Wolves?" Then, as he was untying the rope around his dark green socks, an image stuck in his mind: "What if I let them catch me again? They’d probably tie me up much tighter this time, and I wouldn’t be able to move at all. But why would I do that? Why does this excite me so much?" The thoughts continued racing through Jason’s head—until a loud sound broke his train of thought, caused by his own feet hitting the ground, whether intentionally or not.

"Hey! Grab him—he’s trying to escape!" the Otter boys shouted.

In disbelief at what he had done, Jason didn’t even try to resist. Soon he found himself sitting with his back against a medium-sized tree. Sean lifted his arms and tied them tightly behind his head and behind the tree as well, exposing his armpits, which were soaked with sweat. Eli wrapped a mess of ropes around Jason’s muscular stomach and chest, while Toby focused on his legs, tying them in four places: around the thighs, above the knees, below the knees, and around the ankles (over his socks). Toby also took another rope and stretched Jason’s legs out, tying them to an opposite tree, putting his body into an L-shaped position.

While Jason still stared in confusion, wondering how he had ended up in this situation again, his heart was pounding so fast from excitement that it gave him the answer he wasn’t willing to admit. Finally, the silence was broken by Mason, who approached him holding several bandanas and said:

"This time you're getting the full treatment, Jason! Don’t try to make excuses, and don’t pretend we’re all buddies. You got what you wanted—now open up!"

"Looks like you're right. I really did get what I wanted. Here..." Jason murmured, then gently opened his mouth.

"Wider… Come on, like at the dentist," Mason teased.

Jason gave a slight smile and opened his mouth as wide as he could. Mason stuffed two bandanas into it, then tied them in with rope and wrapped another bandana around, securing the gag in place. A blindfold followed, covering Jason’s eyes—and with that, they finally left him just to sit there. This time, he couldn’t move, couldn’t speak, and couldn’t see. The excitement wasn’t even starting to fade.

* * * * * * * * *

Although he had been tied up for the shortest time, Tyler was the most nervous of them all. He wasn’t the kind of a person that could be still for longer than 5 minutes. He kept grumbling through the bandana gagging his mouth and tried to lower his arms or at least lift his legs. But he couldn’t do either. He was forced to stand there, stretched out, while his Lynx teammates hurried to come to his aid.

* * * * * * * * *

In contrast, Cameron laid calmly at the bottom of a boat, without any attempt to move. He was tied down but relaxed. At one point he thought, "Why even try? I know it’s impossible," and then stopped thinking altogether. He completely cleared his mind, just breathing and gazing at the blue sky above him. Still, he was slightly annoyed that the boys from the Gray Falcons were using him as a human rug, resting their legs across his body. But even that didn’t bother him enough to protest.

Eventually, though, even that peace had to end, and Cameron began to groan loudly beneath his bandana.

"What now?" asked Ian, removing his gag.

"Guys, I’m really sorry, but I…"

"What is it?" Marcus asked.

"I… I have to pee," Cameron said sheepishly, his cheeks turning red.

"Damn it! He’s just making that up because he knows no one’s going to find him here," Ian began protesting.

"I don’t think that’s the case. He’s been quiet here for over two hours—it’s normal that he has to do it at some point," Josh defended him, as usual.

"I’m with Josh on this one. We just need to make sure he doesn’t run off while he does it," added Marcus.

"Okay, okay. You guys know I’ve never given you trouble about it. Tie me however you want—just please hurry. It’s really starting to be urgent," Cameron said, still embarrassed.

And as the Falcons hurried to untie the ropes from Cameron’s body, the sun slowly began to set…
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This chapter was really tricky for me because I need to start pulling all of the plot-threads together. I hope you can still enjoy it. Feel free to leave comments even if you don't like it. I’m always open to constructive criticism. :D

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Very nice chapter, works as a good summary of were we are. I certainly did have fun, especially with Ethan and Noah. And no one to help Ethan, with only four of his kids left.

But I asume things are still happening, so I assume (sadly), that he will come free.

Say, did you talk with the leaders, learning about their thouggts, or are these educated guesses? Like how Jason enjoyed being tied up.
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@FelixSH Thanks! Yeah, I did talk to them. I didn't explain my role in all of this and I didn't really want to go into that directin, as said in the beginning. But let's just say I became very very close with Ethan and Jason (beyond the camp) and that's how I get most of the information for the story. This was the moment Jason realized he liked being tied up, even though he had that feeling for a long time, just avoided it and didn't want to admit it to himself. Ethan and Jason were also close with Cameron, so that's how I know most of the things that happened to him and how he felt. But as you might see, the story of Dylan and Tyler isn't that much developed, because I lack lot of details.
I don't want to spoil anything, but if I write a sequel (after the game ended) it'll involve some more personal and private stuff between some of the leaders. So I'm glad you asked that because at some point I'd have to make my position in this story more clear. :D
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ajohnson wrote: 1 month ago Chapter 7: The Boiling Point
Another delightfully well-written chapter.
It's nice to see all the leaders' different fates evolving, save for Dylan's, of course. I'm glad that cocky fucker was regagged :lol:

I really enjoyed the scene with Jason coming to terms with his own inner thrill at being bound. It's probably a very different feeling from what he's used to as a hunky jock. Looks like he and Cam both have something in common, albeit for very different reasons. Jason seems to like the thrill of being captured/restrained, while for Cam, it's not so much a thrill, but more like relief at not having to make decisions or worry about stuff.

On another note, as much as I enjoy a good revenge plot and a villain, this Noah guy seems ripe for a humbling comeuppance. I can't be the only one hoping he'll end up being taken down a peg...or three! 8-) All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter.

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Since you seem to be open to constructive criticism, I do, however, have a little something to point out. This chapter could benefit from the use of additional line spacing or centred asterisks (as demonstrated in my post) for the different leaders' cutscenes.

Although I realise you are probably going for a seamless transition from one arc to the next, the distinct line spacing between the arcs would make it clearer to the reader that we are switching scenes and zooming in on something happening elsewhere in the camp. Just my two cents.
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@bondagefreak You made a perfect comparison between Jason’s and Cameron’s feelings. I hadn’t thought that deeply myself… about how the two of them share that something in common, and yet are also opposite in a way. Great observation! There's definitely a bond between two of them. :D

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll definitely keep it in mind! It hadn’t occurred to me, and in the previous chapters, there wasn’t really a need to break up the text, since we were mostly following the story in one, or at most two, locations. But now it's different, so I'll settle it.
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I see you made some edits. Awesome! I think it looks really good and clear-cut now.

As for Jason and Cam, obviously, I don't know anything about them other than what you choose to share with us. But going by what's been shared so far, I'd venture to say that they both like the opposite aspects of TUGs. For Jason, it seems to be about the thrill of the capture and the thrill of being forced to lose control...basically the "journey getting there". While for Cam, it's the exact opposite, in that the initial capture terrifies him even though the outcome is highly sought and calming.

One likes the lengthy road trip on his way to a secluded beach. (Jason)
The other one (Cam) just likes the secluded beach, but would rather skip the road trip and simply land there in a snap.

Again, this is pure conjecture based on what little has been shared thus far. I could be completely wrong in my assessment. ;)
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@bondagefreak You're absolutely right. I love it when someone reading my story picks up on something I hadn’t even noticed myself! Awesome! 8-) :D
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I forgot to mention this in my initial review of the most recent chapter, but I really liked Mason's intervention and the ample gagging that followed it. I'm glad they didn't go easy on Jason after that stunt and I'm glad he saw reason and opened up for that full packing. I know we've previously read that the Otter boys are sort of underdogs here, but after this chapter, I'm rooting for them.

I don't know if this'll come as a surprise, but aside from hoping Noah gets his comeuppance, I'm hoping smug rich boy Dylan & his team somehow end up suffering a humiliating loss. That would be gold 8-)
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@bondagefreak Yeah, Jason really desrved to get full treatment. Chapter 8 is coming... ;)
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Chapter 8: One Step Away from Freedom

The sun was slowly setting, and some of the team leaders were just one step away from freedom.

On the other hand, Cameron had different concerns. Marcus, Josh, and Ian had finally untied him, removing the last rope wrapped around his legs. Cameron took the opportunity to stretch his muscles a little and started to remove the bandana they had put back in his mouth, but Marcus immediately stopped him:

“Don’t touch that! It stays on, understood?” Marcus said. Cameron lowered his hands in disappointment and nodded. “Didn’t you say you were in a hurry? Come on, don’t stretch too much—put your hands together in front of you!” Cameron obeyed the orders, his face still red from the awkward situation. “There! This way you can pee by yourself, but you still won’t be completely free. Now move!” Marcus added as he tied Cameron’s hands.

With hurried steps, they led Cameron to the wooden outhouse just beside the cabin they had been hiding in earlier. They closed the door behind him and told him to knock when he was done. “If you try anything stupid or take off that bandana, we’ll make sure you regret it,” Ian said. As Cameron clumsily pulled down his shorts, he noticed red marks across his thighs and below his knees. “I didn’t even realize they tied me that tight,” he thought. Still, he was glad that, finally, his brief moment of relief had come.

Just as he was about to knock on the door, he heard voices and stepped closer to hear what boys were saying.

“Where should we take him now, back to the boat or into the cabin?” Josh asked.

“I’d rather not go back to the boat. I’m gonna get seasick from all that rocking. And I don’t think the Otters will come back here after seeing he’s not inside,” Marcus chimed in.

“Then we take him back to the cabin. How should we tie him up this time? What do you guys think about a hogtie?” Ian asked with great enthusiasm.

“I don’t think there’s any need to mistreat him that much. You can see he’s cooperating and doing everything we say. He doesn’t even try to get free anymore,” Josh defended Cameron.

“Save your sympathy and stupidity for another time! Dylan told us clearly: every prisoner must be properly tied up! What if he’s just pretending? Why risk losing the game over a small detail?” Marcus snapped back.

“Alright, alright,” Josh said, backing down.

“Guys, I think the ‘rug’ role really suited him. I rested my feet on him so nicely, don’t take that pleasure away from me,” Ian added, laughing.

“We’ll think of something similar just because of you, Ian,” Marcus chuckled. “Hey! Are you done in there or what?” he shouted toward Cameron.

Cameron felt a wave of nervousness after overhearing their conversation. His knees were shaking, his heart was pounding, and the palms of his bound hands were sweating nonstop. He wanted to run far away and never get caught again, but then he calmed himself: “Okay, relax. Let them tie you up again. You know nothing bad will actually happen.” Finally, he gathered his courage and knocked on the door, deciding to pretend he hadn’t heard anything.

“Finally! We were starting to worry about you,” Ian said. “Come on, we’ve got a surprise. You’re going back to the cabin—we won’t take you back to the boat anymore, unless there’s an emergency.” Cameron smiled faintly beneath the bandana and let them lead him back inside the cabin.

“Hmm… Let’s see…” Marcus muttered thoughtfully. Cameron’s heart started pounding again, his throat tightened, and he could feel the tension all over his body. He knew they were thinking about how to tie him up next, and he couldn’t hide his nervousness. “Hey! Can I take care of him this time? I’ve got a cool idea,” Ian asked excitedly. Marcus and Josh agreed, saying they’d stay close in case he needed a hand.

Ian signalized for Cameron to lie down on his back between two wooden beams inside the cabin. As he crouched down beside him with two ropes in hand, Ian’s gaze was fixed on Cameron’s legs. Cameron noticed it immediately and was already pulling his legs together even before being told. “Wow! You’re a fast learner, Cam—you already know the drill,” Ian chuckled as he tied Cameron’s ankles together over his white socks. Then he used the second rope to bind his legs just above the knees.

He called Marcus and Josh over to help slide Cameron closer to the beam, so that his legs were pressed up tightly along its length, which they quickly did. Ian tied Cameron’s legs to the upper beam so he couldn’t lower them, and secured them at multiple points along the vertical post, limiting any movement. Finally, he pulled Cameron’s arms above his head, stretched them out, and tied them to the opposite beam. Cameron was now lying in a position opposite from Jason’s: his head and back were flat on the floor, while his legs were standing upright, tightly bound to the beam.

“Perfect!” Ian admired his own work, then kicked off his sneakers, laid down on the floor, and stretched his legs across Cameron’s chest to relax. “You guys can join me if you want,” he said to Marcus and Josh, “though I doubt there’s enough room for all of us this time.” Cameron relaxed again, quietly staring up at his bound, upright legs—really the only thing in his field of view.

* * * * * * * * * *

Meanwhile, as the rest of the Otters slowly were giving up any hope of finding their leader, four of their teammates sat calmly watching Jason, fully aware that this time, he had no chance of escaping. Every few minutes, Jason tried shifting his legs or tugging his hands from the ropes, as if he needed constant confirmation that he was truly helpless this time. He breathed deeply and occasionally muttered unintelligibly. His mouth was stuffed with two bandanas he couldn’t spit out despite his efforts. Finally, he admitted to himself: “Yeah... this actually excites me. I can’t keep pretending it doesn’t.”

* * * * * * * * * *

Jason’s ace, Nate, wasn’t enjoying his captivity nearly as much. After prolonged torment, the Hawks untied his exhausted body from the table and tossed him his green T-shirt, black socks and sneakers to get ready for the road. Nate put on the socks and shoes but, instead of putting it on, he used the shirt to wipe his face and body from water and sweat. “I won’t be needing that,” he said, tossing the shirt aside as he stood up.

One of the Hawks pulled his arms behind his back while another tied them securely. Sam approached him, tying a loose bowline knot around Nate’s neck with thick rope. “You know how this knot works. If you run—you’ll choke yourself,” he warned. Nate only nodded, prompting Sam to add, “I hope you’ll be a good guide dog. Otherwise, I’ll make sure you regret it again.” With four more Hawks flanking them, Sam and Nate began the walk toward the Wolves’ base. The rest stayed behind to guard the prisoners.

Even though he had a reputation as the toughest, bravest Wolf, Nate knew better than to test Sam’s patience again. He led them to the base without resistance. When Luis spotted Nate at the front of the group, he lit up and ran toward him—until he saw the state Nate was in. He froze mid-step, then turned and tried to run. But it was too late. Two Hawks tackled him to the ground effortlessly.

“Sorry, Luis... I couldn’t take it anymore,” Nate said with shame in his voice, as Luis glared at him in disbelief while getting his hands tied behind his back.

Sam pulled the bandana out of Dylan’s mouth and began untying him. “Well done, boys! You followed my training to the letter!” Dylan proudly praised his Hawks. When Sam finally got him loose, Dylan stood up and stretched. “Whew, that was actually a good rest—though I was starting to get a little bored.” He turned around, brushing at the dirt on his clothes in a hopeless attempt to clean himself up.

At one point, Sam pulled out Dylan’s Ray-Ban sunglasses from his pocket and handed them over.

“Here you go, boss!”

“Whoa! I’ll be honest—I really thought he had broken them,” Dylan beamed, pointing at Nate. “It’s time they went back where they belong,” he said while slowly putting them on, his confidence and pride visibly returning with the motion.

“Why are you even wearing those? There’s barely any sun,” Luis snapped.

Dylan sharply turned to him. “Maybe I’d explain it if you had the brain to understand. You should’ve listened when I told you to run. Now you’d better stay quiet.” He pulled the green bandana that still hung around his neck and stuffed it between Luis’s teeth, tying it behind his head. “There we go! Suits you better anyway. Even matches your shirt,” he added with a smirk, ruffling Luis’s hair.“

Gag this one too,” Dylan ordered, pointing at Nate. “We don’t need them anymore, so there’s no point in letting them talk until the game’s over.” With that, Dylan took command from Sam and led the team toward their prisoner base.

* * * * * * * * * *

At the same time, a large group of Lynxes, guided by Mark, was closing in on the Hawks’ base. Jimmy, realizing what was happening, tried to organize the remaining Hawks for a defense, but they were too few. They tried to flee, but even that failed. Within 10 minutes, all four of them were on the ground with their hands tied behind their back. Tyler watched it all unfold, muffled laughter escaping past the bandana stuffed in his mouth, and his feet bouncing in a kind of excited tapping that looked like failed attempts at hopping. When the Hawks were all secured, a few Lynxes approached and began untying Tyler.

“Finally! Where have you been? You were off goofing around while I was living through a war horror!” he said over-dramatically, as usual.

“Oh, calm down, Tyler. Doesn’t look like they did anything to you,” Ben replied skeptically while untying his legs.”

“What do you mean nothing? They nearly hanged me from this tree! I made friends with the ants and spiders crawling all over it—and me. Not letting me move or speak? That’s torture!” Tyler went on joking.

“Especially this kiddo,” he added, pointing at Jimmy. “Hey, Jimmy, you might not know it, but I hold grudges.”

“Wanna lead him to the cabin?” Liam asked.

“Nah, you do it… I’ve got a score to settle with him when we get there. Right now I need to stretch and run around a bit. The important thing is—we caught all the Hawks. Victory is ouuuurs!” Tyler yelled with glee, darting between the boys like a bullet.

“Just don’t get yourself lost again,” Liam laughed.

* * * * * * * * * *

Back at the Lynx shed, Noah stood by the window, impatiently waiting for his team to return so they could celebrate their win.

Ethan saw it as his final chance—to save both himself and his team from defeat and further humiliation. The ropes around his wrists were still tight, no way he could free his hands. But then he remembered a trick. He began slowly shifting his bound legs, trying to slip off his sneakers. When he managed that, the ropes around his ankles loosened considerably, and he finally managed to free his legs.

He stood up quietly and crept toward the back door, but the old wooden floor betrayed him—Creak! Noah instantly turned around and saw Ethan standing there, hands still tied behind his back and gagged. Knowing this was it, Noah let out a furious yell and charged—but Ethan rammed into him with his body, knocking him to the floor. Then he sprinted toward the door and freedom.

Noah stared in disbelief, realizing that his own carelessness was about to cost them the sure win. Knowing he couldn’t catch Ethan, especially barefoot, he grabbed something from the table and rushed over to little Cody. Ethan had just stepped outside, a wave of joy flooding over him, when he froze in place at the sound of Cody’s terrified scream

He turned around and saw a horrifying sight through the open shed door. Noah, with one hand, was prying Cody’s mouth open, while in the other he held a live worm—hovering it just above Cody’s lips. Out of breath, sweaty, and exhausted, Ethan stood frozen in place, eyes wide in shock. “You know exactly what’ll happen if you don’t come back right now,” Noah said coldly. Ethan stepped up to the cabin door, looked at Cody, then turned back and stared toward freedom. He couldn’t take the humiliation anymore, but he also couldn’t leave Cody at the mercy of Noah’s twisted mind.

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TO BE CONTINUED…
The story about this game nears its end. There are only one or two chapters left. How do you think it’ll end? What decision would you make at Ethan’s place?
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Another fun chapter! I tend not to guess, how stories develop, I find it interesting enough to just watch them unfold. But I do hope that Ethan comes back. Sure, getting away would help win the game for his group, but I feel like he should try to protect them from Noahs bullying as good as he can.
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Thanks, @FelixSH! I had some problems writing this chapter, so I don't know whether or not I'll be able to finish the story. Anyway, if I can't continue, I'll just write shortly what happened until the end of the game and afterwards.
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What problems do you mean? Don't remember the details, or is it too convoluted, to write down? I wrote a somewhat complex story myself, some years ago, maybe I can help you in that case.
Feel free to pm me, if you don't want to talk about that openly. But it's just an offer, before you stop.
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