A Life in Bondage and Porn: Plymouth (MF+/F+)

[Caesar73]

"Do what I say, when I say. Good behavior gets rewarded, bad gets punished."

Sounds simple enough ) I am curious how this will play out

[Switchgirl]

Interesting that Brooke’s domme side flares only briefly. No Mistress and realising this - means she is heading down the complete sub path - bratty - but a sub nonetheless.

However, we probably all knew this already….didn’t we?

As usual, loving this story - really never knowing where the next chapter is going to take us…

[BlissfulMisery]

Interesting that Brooke’s domme side flares only briefly. No Mistress and realising this - means she is heading down the complete sub path - bratty - but a sub nonetheless.

However, we probably all knew this already….didn’t we?

Indeed - Brooke's occasional Domme streaks have always seemed very much 'for the sake of the scenario', if that makes any sense. When she is being a sub her thoughts are vivid, flowy, 'in the moment', meanwhile when she is being a Domme, she is much more clinical, detached. As if it is a role she is playing for the sake of the other person. Not something that comes naturally, nor something that fulfills an inner need the same way submission does for her.

To be clear, not calling anything out with the quote, just using it to provide context to my own response.

"If it's something simple, like a drink. A pee." Shrugging. "Don't ask, otherwise you'll annoy us both."

She is very much *not* a micromanager

Perfectly understandable, especially if operating in the real world where this sort of thing can easily become quite tedious.

So, prehaps shorter then it could be, and certainly less Domme then it could be.

It does come off as 'abridged', but that makes sense given the repeated rewrites you mentioned. It is sometimes better to not try to push too hard with something that does not seem to be working out/going the right direction.

[RopeBunny]

Interesting that Brooke’s domme side flares only briefly.

I could've written up a longer chapter, channeling Brookes Domme side, but what you've read is what felt right.

She- Brooke -isn't a natural Domme, only when she has to be, or at brief flashed moments.

(Like binding Sonya to the tractor, more playful then full on ownership.)

Indeed - Brooke's occasional Domme streaks have always seemed very much 'for the sake of the scenario', if that makes any sense.

It does, and tacks neatly onto what I mentioned above. Brooke can switch, be the Domme but only when circumstances call for it, random moments or fantasies aside.

The character works better as a sub, and I enjoy writing her as such more.

[RopeBunny]

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[RopeBunny]

The next chapters, the next few steps down the road are already set. Regardless of the result.

But after that....

Quoting the comment I made, when I made/added the poll.

Those chapters are now done, the steps walked.

And I see a fairly comfortable win for Sonya, so, I'll go away and have a think....

Thank you for voting, reading, commenting

[Dpsiic]

Another great read. Love the way your mind works.

[BlissfulMisery]

Coming up here and stripping, fucking both of us needing the release pre shoot.

Feels like there is a missing comma after 'fucking'. As it stands, the next sentence is required to confirm that this is not her using it as an expletive - the structure of the sentence makes it ambiguous (especially since usually doing 'and' but then continuing to list things is confusing). Personally would have probably written something like 'Coming up here, stripping and fucking - both of us needed the release pre-shoot.' But I have an obsession with overusing dashes and this can obviously be done in many ways.

Obviously not important, but these sorts of things do stick out to me. If you do not want me to bring them up, please tell me and I will not do it again.

Enjoying the feel and weight of each other. Sonya's young curves and my super sized canons.

I find Brooke describing others as young quite amusing. Obviously it is relative in this case, and arguably refers more to difference in bondage experience, but she is not much older then Sonya herself.

Fighting to avoid the orgasm that I do actually want, but in the moment, bound and gagged. You forget where and what you are, the something- climax -that you can't control or stop becomes the enemy.

The eternal contradiction at the heart of all (well, maybe not *all*, but for many) bondage I suppose. Wanting to give up control so that one can 'fight' the situation one desires to be in. Pages and pages have been written on the subject, but it is a perfect showcase of how human psychology can be quite strange.

To be played so effectively.

Indeed!

Well over halfway infatuated with Sonya already, this display only serving to push me further within her shadow.

Only making me more willing to kneel at her command and whim.

Only halfway? Brooke should give Sonya a little more credit - this is a great way for them to bond

Horrible puns and bad jokes aside, Sonya really knows how to play with Brooke - both physically and mentally.

And I appreciated the mention of the aftermath. An important bit of catharsis both in the writing sense and the 'realism' sense. After being broken down so thoroughly, one does need to be built back up after all. A wonderful, tender moment for the two to share to cap off a great scene.

[Switchgirl]

Lovely chapter - a sleepsack - first time you’ve used that on Brooke I think? But a lovely change from rope (not that theres anything wrong with rope!)

I love the story that is developing with Sonya and Brooke - the sub/ domme moving to a slave/ Mistress (though she hates that shit!) - however…… you’re like GRRM - nobody knows what is around the corner.

I hope you can keep this story going - its one of your best (and thats a high bar!)

[RopeBunny]

Coming up here and stripping, fucking both of us needing the release pre shoot.

Feels like there is a missing comma after 'fucking'.

And so there is I sometimes worry I use too much punctuation, trying to break sentences up and so forth. So on the final read through I'll remove or add.

And as you've spotted that isn't always successful

And I appreciated the mention of the aftermath

Not always a part of the play that I remember, easy to knock out a while chapter of bondage and leave things with the girl still bound, only to start the next jumping to something else.

But, sometimes it's nice to include and I'm glad to enjoyed that.

[RopeBunny]

Lovely chapter - a sleepsack - first time you’ve used that on Brooke I think? But a lovely change from rope (not that theres anything wrong with rope!)

Definitely nothing at all wrong with rope

Think this is the first sleep sack, something I love, am a fan of but not an obvious or first choice for me. But it worked really well, giving Sonya the chance to keep Brooke how she wants her

I hope you can keep this story going - its one of your best (and thats a high bar!)

I will. Am, keeping this going. Promise. Just need to come up with some ideas to get things rolling beyond the chapter I'm currently writing.

Brooke isn't done yet.

[RopeBunny]

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[RopeBunny]

And there we go the poll result, acted upon.

Sorry this took so long, I got as far as Sonya's 'I love you' and Brookes response.

Then fell down a rabbit hole, ended up writing something quite extreme, Brooke turning slave, before realising I didn't want that.

I wanted something more mutual, if slanted towards Sonya as Domme, but not to the exclusion of Brooke playing too.

So I went back and rewrote the second half.

Hope you all enjoyed, and thanks for reading.

[BlissfulMisery]

And so there is I sometimes worry I use too much punctuation, trying to break sentences up and so forth. So on the final read through I'll remove or add.

And as you've spotted that isn't always successful

Not an uncommon thing to miss the obvious when going through stuff - easy to tunnel vision on other 'more important' things.

Certainly beats being a chronic over user of run-on sentences like myself

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I've been home fourty minutes, sitting at the kitchen table staring at an empty mug that I will, will fill with coffee.

Soon.

A great way to capture her mood - definitely know the feeling!

And a great bit of chemistry between them in their exchange. They really are made for each other! While that might seem trite, given the obvious fact that they are fictional characters created for that purpose, this comes across far better then in most comparable cases I have read - it feels completely natural and these sections of dialogue are a great showcase of why.

Unsurprising that Sonya won the poll, given that this has been the norm for pretty much all their interactions so far.

Goading someone into doing bad things to me moments after telling them I don't want said things done.

This is why I get into so much trouble.

Indeed Brooke, indeed

Great to see them finally *talk* instead of doing their usual verbal dance, even if it is very cute to read. Figuring out where the other stands, instead of communicating based on innuendo and vague impressions. Fun, but if one wants to go beyond 'just fun', there needs to be more directness, and it is nice to see that finally happening (and yes I am aware that a lot of the reason for why it did not earlier was to keep the options open as it were).

[Switchgirl]

Excellent - love the fact Brooke has realised she doesn’t want to be a slave but wants to be the sub in the relationship with the occasional switch which seems perfect for her!

Loved the story and hope we see Brooke (and Sonya?) soon!

[Caesar73]

Excellent - love the fact Brooke has realised she doesn’t want to be a slave but wants to be the sub in the relationship with the occasional switch which seems perfect for her!

Loved the story and hope we see Brooke (and Sonya?) soon!

I share that Assessment!

[RopeBunny]

Goading someone into doing bad things to me moments after telling them I don't want said things done.

This is why I get into so much trouble.

Indeed Brooke, indeed

Happy to see you picking out this part, one of my favourites too

And I'm liking the chemistry too, thanks. Somehow, because in the beginning I hadn't planned for Brooke to end up solely with any of the various ladies. Not in a solo serious relationship capacity.

But. Somehow I've ended up writing Sonya as a really good fit

Excellent - love the fact Brooke has realised she doesn’t want to be a slave but wants to be the sub in the relationship with the occasional switch which seems perfect for her!

Loved the story and hope we see Brooke (and Sonya?) soon!

Thanks, and to @Caesar73 for sharing the thoughts too

I really didnt- kinda did but know it won't work/last -want to write Brooke back into a slave relationship. So, this should work.

And we'll definitely see much more of Sonya, just a small filler style chapter below and then onwards.

[RopeBunny]

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[BlissfulMisery]

But. Somehow I've ended up writing Sonya as a really good fit

A happy accident

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Maybe before the accident I ran across riggers, site owners who were too willing to overstep that employer-employee line. But not since. I can live with it, no point ditching the shoot, for which I am getting paid.

It just sucks a little, that he feels allowed to grope me so obviously.

Indeed

And no it hasn't escaped my attention that we're Matt instead named Melony or Melissa I wouldn't be complaining.

Ahh the difference a single bit of 'punctuation' (technically not punctuation I suppose) makes - 'we're' should be 'were'. Otherwise the sentence is quite confusing

A nice little interlude overall, even if a touch tense due to Matt taking a few too many liberties. Was not sure which way it would go. In this case, it was the way a situation like that would usually end, but of course in fiction there is always the chance of the author deciding to 'make it interesting'.

[RopeBunny]

Ahh the difference a single bit of 'punctuation'

Another one slips by me

And yes, I suppose I could've extended the Matt shoot, I could've gone there, gone further into his liberty taking.

Except it was only ever meant to be a filler chapter, and his groping of Brooke just kind of slipped into the writing process, unplanned yet it worked.

[RopeBunny]

Normally I prefer to post multiple chapters these days, can't be much bothered with cliffhangers due to how few comments they create.

And isn't the whole point of a cliffhanger to make people talk?

Still.

Having just written this, what I'd thought of as part one, I've decided to post it.

Like a teaser

[RopeBunny]

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[Switchgirl]

Wow - that escalated fast! Meeting the parents!!

Can’t wait to see where this headed!

[BlissfulMisery]

Except it was only ever meant to be a filler chapter, and his groping of Brooke just kind of slipped into the writing process, unplanned yet it worked.

I had assumed so. But as I have mentioned before, those sorts of 'irrelevant in the grand scheme of things' details that you often sprinkle in definitely add to the story, and help make the filler less filler.

And isn't the whole point of a cliffhanger to make people talk?

Ahh, but as you note, people are quite sparing with their commentary around here. Unfortunate, but many reasons for it I suppose.

Like a teaser

But a teaser for what? Awkward dinner where they spend the whole time dodging/lying about the obvious question of how they met while living relatively far apart? Drama filled reveal? This story tends to stay fairly grounded, so probably more the former then the latter, but either way, curious to see what direction it ends up leaning.

When is the last time I met a girlfriends parents?

Ironic, considering Brooke did actually bring one of her previous girlfriends to meet *her* parents. Or mother and step-father I suppose.

[Caesar73]

Like this Conversation very much. Sonya gets Plymouth on the wrong foot - but she reacts quickly enough. That Dinner will without any doubt interesting - to say the least @RopeBunny !