Jester's Revenge. Or. Plymouth part II (MF+/F+) (FINISHED) (NEW story coming soon)

[BlissfulMisery]

Short, but ominous. Although I think the general shape of what happened is not hard to guess, still very interested to see the details.

The trouble is I like Plymouth. I want her to be safe. In many ways I feel a connection with her, as silly as it may sound when I write this story I'm kind of living her life in my head.

I feel like that is bound to happen if you write a character long enough.

This. All that I'm trying to do here. Well. It's a story I liked when I thought it up. But it's proved hard to write at times.

Personally I think the general concept of the story is great. I have always enjoyed exploring these sorts of themes; ie 'taking it too far, and the consequences of such'. You are not wrong however that it can be a little hard to stomach doing that to a character.

I hope you'll all carry on with me.

Plan to!

[GreyLord]

I like this small chapter, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention]. You offer us a glimmer of hope.

[RopeBunny]

Thank you both.

More is coming of course

[Rdo4y8]

Brooke is an incredibly layered character and I’m fascinated by her journey. Looking forward to what’s next.

[RopeBunny]

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[RopeBunny]

Sorry it's been so long. Too long.

That's why three chapters. And I could've written a ton more detail here I realise, I've been very light on the events of Brooke's quest for freedom.

But I just needed to get it done. To confirm out the other side of a story line I wasn't 100% enjoying writing.

Is this the end?

Not a clue.

[GreyLord]

I am very glad, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention], to see Brooke take charge of her life once again.

[tickletied84]

Wonderful, and well worth waiting for. 3 very contrasting chapters that really bring Brooke's story forward and into the light side again.

Loved the eavesdropping grave digger Kaylee

[BlissfulMisery]

Hey,

Great to see a follow-up (possibly conclusion?). Well worth the wait, as has already been said.

If you do something often enough it becomes the norm. The strangest things can be adapted to, accepted and lived with.

Very much true, for better or for worse, depending on the circumstances. The mind has an uncanny ability to adapt to any new norm, and that tends to go both ways; part of what makes us generally strive to improve our situation, but also allows people to mentally bear the bleakest of circumstances. But that is going more then a little beyond the scope of this story.

Deborah crumpled before my advance, seeming to shrink even as I grew to fill the space.

I really liked this line. Very evocative, and a great metaphor for the dynamic in play.

And I could've written a ton more detail here I realise

There is *always* more detail that can be added to a story or to scenes, but often short and to the point (without sacrificing meaning or clarity) is better; a lesson I certainly struggle to put into practice, so I tend to appreciate it when I see it. And if you were not enjoying writing it, as you said, then there was no reason to belabor it.

I really enjoyed these chapters. Hope to see more at some point, even if it is a new or different story.

[Switchgirl]

Excellent chapters.

Loved that Brooke became a slave and then the taking back control…..

Beautifully written in your own unique style…would love to see more Brooke…

[Caesar73]

Indeed, I like it too, that Brooke takes back the reigns - thank you for these three chapters [mention]RopeBunny[/mention]

[slackywacky]

We all have moments (some short some longer) where you wonder what comes next. Am I going this way with my story or that way. Will it get darker, will it follow an arc that I did not plan? These things happen.

And as a reader, I (we) will quietly wait for the arrival of the next chapter, as, unless there is a 'the end', any story could continue.
Whatever the reasons, I am glad you gave us these 3 chapters, and, as you stated, since you have no clue if there will be more, we will wait patiently. And if this is the end, I thank you for writing this marvelous tale!

[RopeBunny]

Thank you all for the comments, after such a long absence it's great to see you've been patiently waiting.

Deborah crumpled before my advance, seeming to shrink even as I grew to fill the space.

I really liked this line. Very evocative, and a great metaphor for the dynamic in play.

As did I. Tend to find such lines come without planning. Some of my best stuff is on the fly. And in truth most of what I write comes from rough ideas. A to B to C and so forth, just pinpoints of things I want to happen.

I fill in the details as I go, which does sometimes lead to a change of plan mid story

Which can make things interesting.

Beautifully written in your own unique style…would love to see more Brooke…

if there will be more, we will wait patiently.

There is, will be, more I have plan, after some thought. This tale evolved into something I grew to not enjoy. At times I loved writing Deborah the Domme, however more then anyone else I've written here Plymouth has a lot of me in her. I've become quite invested in her over the chapters of 'Plymouth Rising' and now 'Jester's Revenge' and so it was hard at times to write her fall down into Deborah's rabbit hole.

So. I shall begin a third tale. Something new. And hopefully not so dark.

Something more fun prehaps

Watch this space....

[slackywacky]

Watch this space....

Once my partner removes my blindfold, I will watch this space...

[BlissfulMisery]

And in truth most of what I write comes from rough ideas. A to B to C and so forth, just pinpoints of things I want to happen.

I fill in the details as I go, which does sometimes lead to a change of plan mid story.

I think that is the right way to go; it is better to have the characters guide the story to some extent, rather then shoehorning the characters into following 'the plan'. Keeps everything more believable, and means that sticking to character becomes practically automatic.

There is, will be, more I have plan, after some thought. This tale evolved into something I grew to not enjoy. At times I loved writing Deborah the Domme, however more then anyone else I've written here Plymouth has a lot of me in her. I've become quite invested in her over the chapters of 'Plymouth Rising' and now 'Jester's Revenge' and so it was hard at times to write her fall down into Deborah's rabbit hole.

I will admit, I have an unnatural fascination with 'dark' stories, (well, specifically emotionally dark), but I can also relate to how it can wear on you to write such a thing, as it requires putting yourself in the correct mindset, and it is by definition not a pleasant one. Only gets worse if as you said, you have an affinity for the character(s) involved. So I can certainly understand not enjoying it, especially if that was not the plan. Still, intended or not, I think you wrote the situation in a compelling way, and that is deserving of praise.

On a lighter note, curious if the titular Jester of this tale will come up in the new story, as that seems to have become somewhat of a loose end. I assume not, as it seems to have been a victim of an impromptu change of direction, but...

Watch this space....

Plan to!

[Fandango]

There is, will be, more I have plan, after some thought. This tale evolved into something I grew to not enjoy. At times I loved writing Deborah the Domme, however more then anyone else I've written here Plymouth has a lot of me in her. I've become quite invested in her over the chapters of 'Plymouth Rising' and now 'Jester's Revenge' and so it was hard at times to write her fall down into Deborah's rabbit hole.

So. I shall begin a third tale. Something new. And hopefully not so dark.

Something more fun prehaps

You're a very talented writer and I'm confident that I'll enjoy reading anything that you put forth. It only seems fair that you should enjoy writing it also.