Jester's Revenge. Or. Plymouth part II (MF+/F+) (FINISHED) (NEW story coming soon)

[GreyLord]

Poor Trevor, he is so fortunate to have found Plymouth. Is a new day dawning for them?

[Bound to Please]

Great chapter Ropebunny keep it up. I've read much of your work on this site but I realize I haven't read Plymouth Rising yet so I guess I have some catching up to do.

[Caesar73]

That was quite the chapter: First the dream sequence, then the meeting with Trevor I liked the composition.

[RopeBunny]

I haven't read Plymouth Rising yet so I guess I have some catching up to do.

Of course I'd love you to read it, Plymouth rising is one of the best things I've written. In my opinion. However in this part two I shall be explaining anything that resurfaces (like Trevor) from part one. So don't feel as though you must read it.

That was quite the chapter: First the dream sequence, then the meeting with Trevor I liked the composition.

Thank you. Lots to fit in, I'm glad it came across well.

Is a new day dawning for them?

Not sure Trevor will ever be more then just a job/friends for Plymouth. Certainly as I've written Trevor is commited to remaining single, waiting to meet his wife again.

Good to find comments waiting for me, always good

[BlissfulMisery]

Hey,

Sorry for not saying much, but I have actually been keeping up as well, just bouncing between things. Enjoying the last few chapters as usual.

Your introduction of Elwood is outstanding. He represents the dreams of all would be, almost be, want to be riggers.

Personally found it quite amusing how overwhelmed he seemed . Not that it didn't make sense of course. It's common in TUG stories to have scenes of 'beginner getting tied up'; it's how Plymouth started out, but it's less common to see the roles reversed (experienced person tied up by inexperienced/uncertain).

[RopeBunny]

Hey,

Sorry for not saying much, but I have actually been keeping up as well, just bouncing between things. Enjoying the last few chapters as usual.

Don't be sorry.

I'll never go hunting for comments, but those I do get I'm grateful for. As and when you can, or want to, is fine.

The main thing is that you're reading and still enjoying this tale

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

You are hitting your stride, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention]. Your writing is clear, descriptive, and easy to read. I was led onward with a rush. You have created fantastic anticipation for this Carnival. This may be your best yet.

[BlissfulMisery]

The main thing is that you're reading and still enjoying this tale

Certainly am

Ambitious plans Brooke has so far.

Feels like the titular Jester is going to come into play soon as a part of the Carnival perhaps, but I guess we shall have to see.

[Caesar73]

So Plymouth has found the right people to let vision come true! Sounds fascinating and I am curious what will become out of it

[RopeBunny]

Well. Wait no more, because here we go.

A necessarily long chapter, because I let my imagination run loose, and didn't want to leave out any of the several ideas I thought up.

Thanks for commenting, enjoy

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

[mention]RopeBunny[/mention], you have unfolded your vision of this Carnival and displayed it for us in a very interesting and unique way. Very original and it was fascinating to the last word. Thank you.

[RopeBunny]

@RopeBunny, you have unfolded your vision of this Carnival and displayed it for us in a very interesting and unique way. Very original and it was fascinating to the last word. Thank you.

Thanks.

This is some good praise you give me, which I was happy to find

[tickletied84]

Wow! Can I go to the Carnival please?!

So descriptive, and the 'thank you' message in the gift shop (of course there's a gift shop!) kept the emotions of the tale included.

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

If this is not exactly a cliffhanger, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention], it i the next thing to one. We are left dangling and wondering just what Deborah's game is. But I feel sure that you will let us know when you are ready. Great work as always.

[RopeBunny]

let us know when you are ready.

Which won't actually be long. I'm in another one of my zones Can't seem to stop writing.

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

Hot, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention]. This was a surprise. I did not think she would give in to Deborah, at least no so easily.

[BlissfulMisery]

Interesting change of perspective for the carnival itself. The atmosphere/general ambiance hit just the right tone, very vivid.

Interesting how Deborah seemed to change her mind. It stretches credulity that she was in the room by coincidence. Maybe she was merely toying with Brooke, but it seems a little too obvious of an answer.

Also seems like Brooke is indeed still struggling with separating fantasy from reality, or more specifically not giving into impulses that have gotten her into trouble before. Hard to tell how serious Deborah is, and I have a suspicion that once the proverbial honeymoon is over, they might have different ideas on what they want from each other.

Either way, idle musings aside, great chapters, a pleasure to catch up on.

[RopeBunny]

I did not think she would give in to Deborah, at least no so easily.

We all get carried away in the moment no doubt there will be some, doubts, coming at some point.

Interesting change of perspective for the carnival itself. The atmosphere/general ambiance hit just the right tone, very vivid.

Wanted to write the Carnival chapter almost as an aside. The story is from Brooke/Plymouth's perspective, I wanted Carnival to be told as though through the eyes of a guest.

This is why it doesn't even have a chapter number.

I'm happy it came across well.

Thank you, both, for commenting. And thanks everyone else for reading. The Deborah storyline will evolve as we go, questions being answered and so forth.

Might take a small amount of extra time to post the next chapter. I, as often happens when in the zone, got a little but carried away and wound up writing Plymouth into a dark place. Where I, upon re-reading, realised I don't want her to be.

So. Going back in the change the tone but keep the overall direction.

Coming soon

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

Okay, up front. Is she a fool? The answer is yes, absolutely. But she is my kind of fool, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention].

Then there is the ever fortunate Elwood. How lucky can one kid be?

[BlissfulMisery]

One step deeper into the waters.

Fancy language aside, not much to say that would be new and interesting, the chapter is a logical extension of previous events.

Elwood's comment makes me think he and Deborah will end up meeting at some point, and I wonder what will happen then.

As always, appreciate the effort that goes into writing these.