Lupin Manor (f+/f+) (NEW *CARMEN* NEW 21/10)

[RopeBunny]

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[Shotrow]

A found footage story? I don't believe I've ever seen that here before. Interested to see where this goes.

[RopeBunny]

A found footage story?

Actually. Not.

Just a different way of doing the introduction, showing most of the main players.

I have done this style before:

https://tugstories.com/viewtopic.php?f=17&t=9405

The first three chapters are all written found footage style, to be read like a script, and then 004 opens with someone having watched that footage, and the story moves on.

Thanks for commenting

[Nainur]

A found footage story?

Actually. Not.

Just a different way of doing the introduction, showing most of the main players.
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Even if you've done it before: fresh enough to me! Intriguing!

[DTbound]

Great setup. I always look forward to reading your stories RopeBunny. Excited for more!

[Caesar73]

Great setup. I always look forward to reading your stories RopeBunny. Excited for more!

I feel the same

[RopeBunny]

Thank you all three

Next part (probably won't always be this fast writing/posting) below.

[RopeBunny]

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[Caesar73]

I like the general set up of story A haunted manor is always a good choice of location, conveniently in the middle of nowhere - looking forward to the next chapter!

[slackywacky]

Interesting start. Let's see where this goes...

[BlissfulMisery]

Glad to see another story from you!

Thinking it is about 80/20 odds that the cliffhanger is them getting scared by their own proverbial shadow.

Good job capturing the general chaotic nervous energy. Plenty of tension/buildup, but the question is, what is it leading to?

[RopeBunny]

A haunted manor is always a good choice of location

I've been meaning to do a TUGs ghost story for awhile, have been thinking of and rejecting ideas and plots for some time. But this one I like

Thinking it is about 80/20 odds that the cliffhanger is them getting scared by their own proverbial shadow.

Think. Not.

Next chapter below should be something of a small reveal.

[RopeBunny]

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[Shotrow]

And now we finally meet the ghost of the manor. One down, four to go.

One problem I'm having is telling the five girls apart. Might have been nice to spend a little more time establishing their individual personalities and motivations.

But either way, I'm excited to see where this goes.

[Nainur]

Whoooohooohoooh! Spine tingling! Loving it!

[RopeBunny]

One problem I'm having is telling the five girls apart. Might have been nice to spend a little more time establishing their individual personalities and motivations.

My fault. Oops.

Too fixated on the introduction I already had, the 'found footage' video style, and then I suppose 001 didn't actually do a huge amount beyond giving names.

Hopefully. As we go forward more will become apparent regarding how each girl looks and thinks and so forth. I do tend to be fairly good at backstories and asides, so, no doubt these will come.

[BlissfulMisery]

One problem I'm having is telling the five girls apart. Might have been nice to spend a little more time establishing their individual personalities and motivations.

My fault. Oops.

Too fixated on the introduction I already had, the 'found footage' video style, and then I suppose 001 didn't actually do a huge amount beyond giving names.

Hopefully. As we go forward more will become apparent regarding how each girl looks and thinks and so forth. I do tend to be fairly good at backstories and asides, so, no doubt these will come.

Valid point, but I feel there will be plenty of room to flesh out the characters. Trying to dump 5 characters worth of exposition in the first 1-2 chapters would probably end up being very awkward.

Well seems I was wrong about the scare. Guess we (they?) get to meet the 'ghost of bondage past' sooner then I expected.

I enjoyed the disjointed, almost dreamlike thinking process of the ghost. Captures that feeling of being trapped/confused for far, far, far too long, eventually losing parts of oneself, until what is left is a shadow, or an impression, much like what ghosts are believed to be.

[RopeBunny]

Trying to dump 5 characters worth of exposition in the first 1-2 chapters would probably end up being very awkward.

This, I agree. I'm not a fan of stopping a story mid flow to explain things or do descriptions of characters. I prefer to keep things

Is organic the right word?

I'll describe a character as she gets tied, or when someone else looks. Stuff like that.

And similar for plot and backstory, there's always, in the end, a good point where explaining becomes relevant.

So long of course that I've explained the basic plot well enough in the beginning that you all know what's going on anyway

I enjoyed the disjointed, almost dreamlike thinking process of the ghost. Captures that feeling of being trapped/confused for far, far, far too long, eventually losing parts of oneself, until what is left is a shadow, or an impression, much like what ghosts are believed to be.

Excellent I'm so glad this came across. Loved writing Lucille.

I did my own (sort of) take on Alice in Wonderland here some time ago, and especially loved wiring a bunch of semi nonsense. This, a disjointed ghost, was another chance to have some fun with that.

Thanks everyone for the comments/views, thanks for coming ghost hunting with me and the girls

[RopeBunny]

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[GreyLord]

Excellent, [mention]RopeBunny[/mention]. You have so many options with your setup that your actual path must surprise us. The Ghost of Countess Lucille is a fascinating focal point pulling action to herself. It is very handy that ghostly rope appears when needed. You have certainly gotten my interest.

If I could make a small request, would you consider tagging your fans at the beginning of a new story. Some of us are not as swift at picking up on new stories.

[Caesar73]

Very intriguing so far - and creepy I like that. Nice idea with the police report!

[tickletied84]

Ghosts, girls, tie ups, mystery and intrigue!

Agree with [mention]Caesar73[/mention] - the mixed methods of telling this tale really add to it!

[BlissfulMisery]

Nice little interlude.

Seems the ghost has quite a reputation, although of course as is traditional in any ghost story, nobody believes the wild tales of frightened people who probably just saw some bird or animal in the dark, right?

[RopeBunny]

If I could make a small request, would you consider tagging your fans at the beginning of a new story. Some of us are not as swift at picking up on new stories.

I shall try to remember to do this next time I begin something new.

Thanks all for commenting, next part below

[RopeBunny]

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